Feedback from First Draft

Some things that we go as feedback from both our teacher and fellow pupils in our class were that:

• We should make it look less rehearsed (no long pauses)


• Have longer shots


• More visuals (in diary)


• It didn't really capture the essence of film noir (try and stick to the theme of film noir conventions)


• Have shorter cuts


• Hold steady shots

Below are some targets that we came up with together for our group to help us improve for our second draft.

something that i (Victoria) was able to help with was finding a new location as the location we were using before was very far and we weren't able to be in there every day.

The new location is much closer and we can use it anytime after school for our filming which should not be a problem for anyone.